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28 January 2008 @ 08:13 pm
"A Matter of Principle"  
Title: A Matter of Principle
Rating: PG
Category: Gen.
Characters: Sam, Dean, Original Character, and a bit of John.
Word Count: 5300
Summary: Wherein a school administrator from days past nearly blows Sam and Dean's cover.
Author’s Notes: The setting is post-'Nightshifter/'Folsom Prison Blues.' Thanks to just_ruth   for superfast beta and the title idea.

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iamstealthyoneiamstealthyone on January 29th, 2008 07:24 pm (UTC)
Good outsider POV. I like that she doesn’t always make the right guesses about things, like with John, for example. I like that she mistakenly thinks he was recently married and then that he was recently widowed. It’s good when an outside POV doesn’t have all the answers.

I also like the bit about Dean having power of attorney for Sam. It makes sense that he’d need something like that for when John’s not around and Sam needs help.

Favorite lines:

Beverly had never discussed appropriate office attire with her secretary because the support staff always came by to make sure they had a full supply closet and working light bulbs on days Viv wore her pink cashmere top.

*g*

The day we rely on students to keep order is the day we admit we've given up doing it ourselves."

Well said.

"Do you know what your son did to my kid?"

Winchester planted his feet apart, chin tilted up. "Nope," he answered cheerfully. "Is he the concussion or the broken wrist?"


LOL!

Sam Winchester had been a solemn boy; he'd grown into a haunted man.

Good description. And also: Oh, Sam.

A "Missing Child" poster with Adam's picture was tacked on the fence in front of her.

Beverly checked for the police cruiser, got out of the car, and tore it down.


I really like this ending. It’s a good last “action” for the piece.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on January 31st, 2008 11:45 am (UTC)
Those were some of my favorite lines too. Thanks for taking the time to comment!
mre_queckymre_quecky on January 29th, 2008 08:59 pm (UTC)
Wow, cool story, I really loved it!
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on January 30th, 2008 03:52 am (UTC)
Great! Thanks for commenting.
SpinFrog: Open 24 hrsspinfrog on January 29th, 2008 09:11 pm (UTC)
That was so cool! I don't usually read outsider POV, but you've managed to make it totally about the Winchesters, and yet still make me care about the OC. Also: I loved how Dean had come literally running for Sammy, and how he wasn't even out of breath! Also: "Is he the concussion or the broken wrist?" *glee*

BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on January 31st, 2008 11:46 am (UTC)
Thank you! It's my first original character piece, so it was a bit of an experiment. I'm glad you liked it.
redrikkiredrikki on January 29th, 2008 10:15 pm (UTC)
Nice original character. It's always cool seeing the Winchesters through someone else. I especially liked her interaction with John, or more specifically, John's interaction with the other parent. Poor guy. I know I would be terrified if John Winchester got all up in my face.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on January 31st, 2008 11:56 am (UTC)
And John seems to provoke easily, so it seemed like a logical way to go. Thanks for commenting!
Founding member of the Rotfang Conspiracybekkio on January 30th, 2008 02:54 am (UTC)
Really enjoyed this, wonderfully developed OC.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on January 30th, 2008 03:57 am (UTC)
Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for commenting!
This Space Intentionally Left Blank: SPN_DeanBruisebarkley on January 31st, 2008 05:21 am (UTC)
I love the outside point of view here.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on January 31st, 2008 11:56 am (UTC)
Thanks!
Black Samvarablack_samvara on January 31st, 2008 10:19 am (UTC)
"He wasn't the only reason I left Flint. That would have been my third carjacking." Beverly patted her chest, as if that really could slow her heart back to normal. "For the record, Sam, a polite carjacker says, 'You old bitch.'"

Dean looked up from filling the towel with ice. "What does a rude one say?" he asked curiously.

Beverly and Sam both stared at him.


I love the tone you've set here and I think Beverly is wonderful.

Thank you!
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 8th, 2008 12:47 am (UTC)
I got behind on answering feedback--apologies for the delay, and thanks. The three-way interactions with the characters were the most interesting parts to write, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.
harrigan: readingharrigan on February 2nd, 2008 12:47 am (UTC)
Good outsider POV's are such fun! And this was a good 'un ... So glad to have found it!
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 8th, 2008 12:48 am (UTC)
So glad to have found it!

I'm glad you did! Thanks.
peeps wanna see peeps boink: bright unconquered sonsmusesfool on February 2nd, 2008 01:54 am (UTC)
This is lovely. I really liked this look at Sam and Dean from an outside POV of someone who knew them as kids.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 8th, 2008 12:49 am (UTC)
It was a new perspective for me, so I'm glad to hear it worked. Thanks for commenting.
I'd Sell My Soul for a Blunt Instrument ...: Sammydodger_winslow on February 2nd, 2008 02:52 am (UTC)
This was great fun. I love watching the boys run into old teachers. Thanks for sharing this.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 8th, 2008 12:49 am (UTC)
My pleasure. Thanks for the feedback.
questioning in order to create: baby!penguinstigriswolf on February 3rd, 2008 06:44 am (UTC)
Oh, man, this just rocks!
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 8th, 2008 12:50 am (UTC)
Thanks!
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BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 8th, 2008 12:50 am (UTC)
Thanks so much for the rec. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
two sex peas in a sexpod: dean's got freckles on his serious facemalcolm_stjay on February 5th, 2008 05:10 am (UTC)
omigod, Samiam, I GET IT. I had to look it up, but STILL.

That was awesome, seriously. This entire thing was all intricate and well-paced and I LOVED that it was from Beverly's POV (and the fact she was [is?] black was incredibly well-placed, not the first thing you know about her, thumbs up), and that the case was sort of background but in a completely logical way. The scene where Sam gets a headache was totally real, like it hit me with a visual, and that almost NEVER happens to me.

Also, there was no sex or hints of wincest (at least that I could see, but I can be pretty blind). I'm assuming that was your point, and while I usually read fic for the porn, lol, I DEFINITELY didn't notice the lack, and yeah. The characterization was just so great, so canon. (oh man, why don't I gush a little more?)

So, yeah. That was awesome.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 13th, 2008 03:01 am (UTC)
Gush all you want, 'cause that's music to my ears. Yep, there's no wincest in this one, and as a porn-reader myself, I'm thrilled that a non-porny story clicked with people.

Thanks so much for your comments, especially about Beverly: this is pretty much my first original character fic, and I'm appreciating all the responses on her. Finally, I love you for looking up Sam's alias. I spent a lot of time Googling around for emo rock groups to spare Sam more mullet-rock aliases, and it was like a fic fairy godmother waved a magic wand over the story and gave him the perfect alias. But it only works if the readers know the reference. Thank God for Google. :-)
Harmonydeeplyshallow1 on February 6th, 2008 02:28 pm (UTC)
Wonderful story! I loved Beverly and her observations and her recollections of the boys--I really enjoyed being in her head. Thanks so much for sharing!
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 13th, 2008 03:02 am (UTC)
My pleasure! Thank you for your comments.
twi: SPN dean mug shot (mata090680)twistingflame on February 6th, 2008 04:02 pm (UTC)
SAMIAM!! Awesome alias. Truly.

Lovely fic. I especially love Sam being all indignant that Dean thought he lost, and the immense practicality of John making sure Dean had a poa the first moment he was able.
BlueIris's Supernatural Fanfictionblueiris08 on February 13th, 2008 03:12 am (UTC)
SAMIAM!! Awesome alias. Truly.

Yes. Yes, it was. ;-) Stumbling across that was like winning a fic mini-lottery. I'm glad you liked the power of attorney element; the idea floated across my mind when I was sketching out the background of another fic, and it seemed worth a little more development.
(no subject) - twistingflame on February 13th, 2008 06:11 am (UTC) (Expand)